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12-6
cats in the hall
shifting to find
the last afternoon light

12-7
all day the old cat
follows a spot of sun
down the hall

12-8
all my raked leaves
now a pile
at the back door

12-10
cold wind
street empty
a faceless penny

12-12
a cat's balance-
if you stop petting me,
I'll fall

12/21
rusted clouds
seventy miles per hour
towards the coming dawn
A winter set.
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Given 2012-12-27
Winter 2012 Haiku Set by ~RedDragonfly is a spectacular example of the calming nature of haikus. A haiku does not need to follow a 5-7-5 syllable pattern and the form is wonderfully executed here. ( Featured by Nichrysalis )
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1000Themes Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2013
This is so cool !!!!

Haha i loved it xD

especially the faceless penny and the falling cat lol
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RedDragonfly Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013
Thanks for reading!
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:iconladyofgaerdon:
LadyofGaerdon Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2012  Professional Writer
Wonderful. :heart: Congrats on the DD!
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:iconreddragonfly:
RedDragonfly Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2012
Thank you- I'm looking forward to reading your works as well.
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TheBlackSchadow Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2012
The first three are a person's the last two are a cat's point of view! Am I right?
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:iconreddragonfly:
RedDragonfly Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2012
Well the last one is certainly what I think my Ezio is thinking. Whether he really plans these things is for him alone to know.
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EloreCohlt Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This is wonderful. You deserve the DD :)
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:iconreddragonfly:
RedDragonfly Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2012
Thank you for reading!
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:iconneurotype:
neurotype Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
The last one is my favorite for the way it twists the perspective. Rereading the rest, I now have to ask myself if the narrator is watching the cats or being one of them. :D
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RedDragonfly Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2012
I think they suspect I have a cat's brain....
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:iconneurotype:
neurotype Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
:lol: Not a bad thing.
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jade-pandora Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2012
those formally raked leaves -- I sure can relate to that!
and congratulations - it's good to see when Japanese short form is acknowledged for features such as this. <3
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RedDragonfly Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2012
We will take our notice where we can, eh? You keep up ther good work as well.
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:iconjade-pandora:
jade-pandora Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2012
Yes indeed -- and thanks, Candi. ^.^
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breamgappy Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2012
Perfect as usually !!!
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:iconreddragonfly:
RedDragonfly Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2012
Perfect? You flatterer...
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:iconbreamgappy:
breamgappy Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2012
Nobody's perfect :-) But those pieces aren't so far...
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nightshade-keyblade Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Um, hey, is anyone else confused by the syllable count? He calls it a haiku set, but in the first poem:

"cats in the hall
shifting to find
the last afternoon light"

The syllable count is 4, 4, 6. Aren't haikus supposed to be three lines of 5, 7, 5?
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neurotype Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
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:iconnightshade-keyblade:
nightshade-keyblade Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Incredible...the conventions of poetry like haiku...aren't really set in stone, are they?
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neurotype Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
There's a couple of expected elements—the season image and the "cutting" word. I've heard the reason they don't bother with syllable count in English is because what the Japanese use doesn't translate quite correctly as a 'syllable'.
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nightshade-keyblade Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Season image (kigo) in this case would be the raked leaves, indicating that it is the autumn time. And the cutting word/caesura (kireji) in this case would be the dash after "balance". As in:

"a cat's balance-
....."

Have I got it so far?
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neurotype Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I think the kireji would be 'petting' here, but I'm not that brilliant at analysing haiku myself :B
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:iconnightshade-keyblade:
nightshade-keyblade Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Oh, OK. Well, in any case I'm learning useful poetry facts, fo fwee :XD:
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neurotype Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
:giggle:
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RedDragonfly Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2012
Not all modern haiku are counted-syllable, and most of what I write isn't. I do stick to the "modern rules" mostly- but I write what I like. Glad you came to read them!
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nightshade-keyblade Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Wait, they aren't? There are modern rules? You mean, they just have to be three lines in a stanza, inspired by natural imagery and it makes no difference if they aren't 5,7,5 syllables?

:?
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RedDragonfly Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2012
Wikipedia's artucle on haiku includes both the rules we all learn when we first try to write one, and what poets nowadays have been writing, which has evolved into the "new rules".
So the new generation of haiku poets made their own rules. And now we follow them, for as long as we wish before we make our own.
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nightshade-keyblade Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I never learned any of that in school. You learn more outside a classroom than in :hmm:
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RedDragonfly Featured By Owner Dec 31, 2012
Why I love DA!
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:iconnightshade-keyblade:
nightshade-keyblade Featured By Owner Dec 31, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
For reals! :lol:
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nightshade-keyblade Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
My mistake, replace "he" with "she"
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lintu47 Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Congrats on the well deserved DD! :heart:
Have a nice day and Happy Holidays! :santa:
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RedDragonfly Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2012
Thank you, I'm glad you iked them. And happy holidays also to you.
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lintu47 Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you! :santa:
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Dragon-Eve-Love Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2012
i love haikus! I had do do several for school.
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:iconreddragonfly:
RedDragonfly Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2012
Cool- you are now in a rare club. If you put them up on DA, send me the link!
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Dragon-Eve-Love Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2012
ill try. wana be friends?
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:iconreddragonfly:
RedDragonfly Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2012
Sure- looking forward to reading!
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Dragon-Eve-Love Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2012
reading what?
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:iconreddragonfly:
RedDragonfly Featured By Owner Dec 31, 2012
Your writing, silly.
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Dragon-Eve-Love Featured By Owner Dec 31, 2012
ah. well ill submit a haiku sooner or later. to write a poem i have to be inspired but to write a haiku i REALLY have to be inspired.
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RedDragonfly Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2013
I hope we'll be doing a renga tree soon, they are always very inspiring. One person writes a haiku and then people write ones inspired by it, and then more people write haiku inspired by those, etc.
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rlkirkland Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This set brings forth a marvelous warmth. :heart:
Congratulations on your DD feature! :heart::heart:
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:iconreddragonfly:
RedDragonfly Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2012
Thanks, man. You are doing a remodel on your DA page, eh?
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rlkirkland Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
DA 'tweaks' are doing it for me it seems. :lol:
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poetries Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2012
These are beautiful little nuggets of life experiences. :heart:
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:iconreddragonfly:
RedDragonfly Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2012
My life is full of big stresses and pretty little joys.
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riparii Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2012
Second one, it's exactly what they do and you've perfectly
captured the poetry of it.
Very pretty collection, soft and quiet as new snow.
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:iconreddragonfly:
RedDragonfly Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2012
Thanks, and I am hoping for real snow as well!
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