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Link 5, Chain 4b, Set 5

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hawk hanging
above the trembling trees-
silent songbirds
Another link for the chain gang-
Funny how I went to write a poem about wind
and got something so much about stillness.

Reply to Saiun: [link]

-THE HAIKU CHAIN GANG CHALLENGE-
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This is a starting verse (hokku) of a renga (a linked poem). What I would like is for poets out there to write a haiku in response to this poem, to continue the renga. I would like to get as many responses as possible to this poem (the more the better). Then, I will add all the poem-responses as links below in the Artists Comments. In the Artist Comments to your posted reply-poem let people know that you would like them to respond to your poem, and to post the response. Then start putting links to all the responses in your Artists Comments. And so on, and so on. Hopefully it will become like a pick-a-path renga, in which there will be multiple replies to this poem, each a path to follow. And then on each new poem there will be multiple paths to follow as well. And so on...

Please check with me if I haven't explained this well. If you partake cut and paste the above and then wait to see the paths develop. So - here are the rules:

1. Reply to this poem in haiku form.
2. Then post the poem as a new deviation called "Link 2: Haiku Chain Gang" and include the instructions and rules. Obviously replies to your poems will be called "Link 3" and replies to those would be "Link 4" so on.
3. Make sure to put a link to the poem you are responding to in the Artist Comments too.
3. Then leave a comment and link for the poem you are responding too so that they can add it to their Artists Comments.
4. Then wait to see more poems arrive and add them to the Artists Comments.
5. And so on.
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saiun's avatar
I like Dick's suggestion of using "a hawk hangs" in the first line, but I think "silent songbirds" is a strong closing line. It gives the poem an air of tension, as if the birds are holding their breath until the hawk passes. As a reply to my poem I read a second image into this in which the hawk is gliding in the air, joyful to have the wind flowing through it's feathers. The juxtaposition of the hawk's joy and the songbirds' tension/fear is fantastic.